Conversation
Oneday in a beautifull park, Princess Analine is walking around
Princess : " nanana.... what a wonderfull park "
Sudenly
Catloe : " meoong... meong..."
Princess : “ hey! What is that sound ? I think it’s come from behind that grass “
Catloe : “ meong.. Meong.. Help me princess “
Princess : “ wow, what a beautifull kitty, hey kitty what’s your name? “
Catloe : “ my name is catloe, princess. Help me please:( “
Princes : “ oh! Your leg is bleeding, what happend with you? “
Catloe : “ there was a dog bitting my leg when i was eating my food under the tree, princess “
Princess : “ ooow, how a pity you are, come here catloe, i will bring you to my castle and fix you “
Catloe : “ oh, thankyou somuch my princess “
Inthe castle
Princess : “ oke, done! “
Catloe : “ wow thankyou my princess, but i think i cant walk like usual right now. “
Princess : “ yeah i know, so you must stay in my castle, but dont worry, i have a cat so you have a friend “
Catloe : “ really ? Oh thankyou so much “
In the cage
Catcassie : “ hmm, bored. Im alone, i have no friends “
Princess : “ my catcassie! What are you doing?”
Catcassie : “ princess analine! Where are come from? Why are you leave me alone? I’m so lonely “
Princess : “ sorry my lovely cat, i have a sureprise for you “
Catcassie : “ what is that ? “
Princess : “ taraaa... Catcassie, this is catloe, catloe, this is my cat her name is catcassie “
Catloe : “ hello, my name catloe “
Catcassie : “ helo catloe, my name catcassie “
Princess : “ i found catloe in the park with her bleeding leg, so i brought her here. “
Catcassie :“ oh i’m sorry to hear that “
Princess : “ yeah but i’m oke right now “
Catcassie :“ so are you stay in here? “
Catloe : “ i think soo, because i cant walk for a few day “
Catcassie :“ oh yeah, you shoul stay in here with me, right princess ?”
Princess : “ yeah, that’s true, but i think not for a few day, but forever! :D “
Catloe : “ what? Really princess? Ooh you are so kind, thank you princess ‘
Catcassie :“ yeey, im so happy, because now i have a friend and in not lonely anymore! :D”
Princess : “ you're welcome my lovely cats :D “
aloha vina^^
BalasHapusyou put cat in your story, did you cat lovers? hehe:D
anyway, in your prolog you must remove "is" after subject(Princess Around) because the next word is verb, you don't need to add "to be". and there are any typo in the dialogue which in the cage like "sureprise" and "shoul".
let's make comics yeah! *aja aja hwaiting
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Catloe and Catcassie. How about Princess? where's his Prince? :D
BalasHapuswaw your imagination so high but it's good :) don't forget to visit and put your comment on biyanpurnamasari.blogspot.com
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